Goats in the Smoky Mountains

A Story I Wrote

{ 08:45, 2007-Oct-3 } { 22 comments } { Link }

Jill And Tom
Author: Julia Rachel Suarez
Age 10

Once upon a time, there was a little girl named Jill. Her brother, Tom, and their dog, Cowboy, were also in the family. Jill was ten and Tom was eight. One day Jill said, "I want to play." Tom, said, "Let's go and play with Cowboy." Jill said, "Ok, but we can't find his bone." Tom said, "I know where it is; it's under Mother's rosebush. Cowboy hid it there!" Jill said, "Oh, let's go get it."

So Tom and Jill went and got the bone. Jill said, "Ok, now we can play with Cowboy. I will throw the bone and Cowboy will go get it. Then you can throw it, Tom." So Jill threw the bone but Cowboy did not see it. Jill said, "Why didn't Cowboy go get it?" Tom said, "because Cowboy did not see it." Jill said, "Oh, well I will go get it and then you can throw it, Tom." Tom said, "Ok."

So Jill went and got the bone. Tom said, "Now I will throw the bone." So Tom said, "Look, Cowboy. Look at the bone." Then Tom threw the bone and Cowboy went and got it. Jill and Tom said, "Good boy, Cowboy. Good boy." And then Tom said, "Let's play with Cowboy's ball. Do you know where it is, Jill?"

"Yes, I know where it is," said Jill. "It is behind the tree."

But when Tom went to get it, their mother said, "Jill! Tom! Time to do your reading." So Jill and Tom said, "Yes, Mother, we will come and read." And then when they were reading, Jill said, "Oh, Tom, I am big like Mother. I can spell Jesus. J-E-S-U-S." Tom said, "I am big. I can spell Jesus, too." Jill said, "No, Tom, you are not big like me and Mother. You can not spell Jesus." But Tom wanted to be big like Mother and Jill, so Tom said, "I am big like you, Jill. I can spell Cowboy. C-O-W-B-O-Y."

Jill said, "Oh, you are big like Mother and me. We are both big kids now. We are becoming like Mother. We will do things that are big. Jill and Tom went and did things that were big, but when Mother came, she said, "Why are you cleaning your rooms and watering my flowers and feeding the dog? I thought you were reading." Jill said, "Oh, Mother, I am so sorry, for I have disobeyed you." Tom said, "I am sorry, too. Will you forgive us, Mother?"

Mother said, "I will forgive you, but you need to obey. I am happy you were helping and trying to be big, but you need to read as I instructed."

Jill and Tom said, "Yes, Mother, we will obey you next time when you say to do something. Jill said, "But Mother, can we be done reading?" Their mother said, "Yes, you may be done. You both can go outside to play." Jill and Tom said, "Oh, thank you, Mother. Their mother said, "You're welcome. Oh, and Jill - Jane and Paul are coming over today." Jill and Tom were so happy they were coming!

Their mother said, "Jill, you and Jane can play dolls." Jill said, "Ok, I will go get my doll ready." Tom said, "What can I do with Paul, Mother?" His mother said, "You and Paul can play with the dog." Tom said, "Ok."

Just then, Jill ran into the kitchen and said, "Jane and Paul are here!" So Jill and Tom ran out of the house and Jill said, "Oh, good, you are here! Now we can play together." Jill and Jane started playing dolls, but when Paul looked at Tom's dog, he said, "Tom, that is the ugliest dog I have ever seen!" Tom said, "That is not true." Tom did not want to play with Paul.

Tom went inside the house. His mother said, "What are you doing, Tom?" Tom said, "Paul is not nice." His mother said, "Well, I was bringing some cookies. Do you want some?" "No, Mother, I am not hungry."
His mother said, "Ok, I will be outside if you need me."

But when she went outside, she said, "Oh, no! It is about to rain! Come in, children. I do not want you to get wet." Jill said, "Yes, Mother, here we come."

Paul said, "Mrs. May, what can we do now?" Mrs. May said, "Paul, you may play with Tom." Paul said, "Ok, I will play with Tom." So Paul went and played with Tom. Paul said, "I am so sorry for what I said about Cowboy. Can you please forgive me?" Tom said, "Ok, I will forgive you."

Then Jill's mother said, "Jill, I called Paul and Jill's mother and she said that Paul and Jill can stay the night for your birthday tomorrow." Jill was SO happy she ran out of the kitchen and told everyone, and the next morning, Jill got a new kitten from her mother and they all had a good time. THE END.
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{ 09:48, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by UnlikelyHomesteader }
What a great story. You are quite a writer. I love the wonderful moral lessons in it. :O) Well done!!
~Mrs. Carter

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{ 10:03, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by Yxpu }
WOW!

Julie!

Good job!

You should write a big book someday.

Awesome Story!!

{ 10:57, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by wannabeone }
Do you know what I think makes a great fiction writer? Someone who can "paint pictures" with their words, and that's exactly what you did! I could picture everything you wrote about.

Great job, Julia!! Let us know when you write some more!

Blessings from Ohio, Mrs. Wolf<><

Thats a really great story .

{ 10:59, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by Anonymous }
I hope you right more. Thanks for the letter.Hope I see you soon.Paige

How nice!

{ 10:59, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by NancyBaetz }
Hi Julie,
I am so proud of you for writing such a long story! You must have been doing a whole lot of thinking. I can't wait to show my kids! They will love it.
Do you remember meeting us a couple of years ago? I think it must have been two summers ago---my goodness, time goes so quickly! Anyway, I bet you are all grown up now!

Hopefully, one of these days we will get to visit with you all again. Give your dear Mommy a huge hug for me, ok?

Keep writing!
Mrs. Baetz

Great Job!

{ 11:07, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by sagerats }
What a wonderful story! You did a very good job. It's nice to read a story where the children respect their parents. Keep it up!

Abiding in the Vine!

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{ 11:22, 2007-Oct-3 } { Posted by Eyebright }
Hi!

That was a really good story, and it even had a good lesson in it! Definately keep up the good writing!

Eyebright
http://www.homeschoolblogger.com/Eyebright

Julie - you are gifted!

{ 01:08, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by Anonymous }
Julie,

You are a gifted young lady. God has given you a talent and you are using it for His glory and are doing exactly what you are supposed to do. This reminded me of some of my first readers as a child that were written by adults! This is really, really good, Julia.

You have show the children to have good character. You have problems that are solved as all good stories have, and you end well.

This may be something you want to consider working on and having someone illustrate for you or you could even illustrate it yourself.

What a great project!

I hope to see you again in the near future, Julia!

Keep serving God with your writing!

Love you!

Mrs. Wuehler

What a Blessing

{ 05:41, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by jillnovak }
Dear Julia,
Your mommy sent me a note to tell me that you had written this story. I am so glad she did. I enjoyed it very much and want to encourage you to keep writing. I can tell you have a heart after God and want to share the good news with others.Keep up the good work!
Elizabeth is starting a little section in the Girlhood about taking care of animals and other animal facts. I hope you will submit some stories about your animals. Do you have goats, too?

Love,
Mrs. Novak

Hi Friend!

{ 12:05, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by MaidenInTraining }
That story is so funny. I like it so much that I have to leave you comment on your blog.

Love
Hannah

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{ 12:10, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by Yxpu }
Hahaha...

Thanks for the comment.
Your welcome!

:P

:o)

{ 03:15, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by Tessa }
What a good story!!!
Have a great day!

-Tessa

http://the-milkshake16.blogspot.com/

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{ 08:52, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by Anonymous }
Hi Julia,
That was a wonderful story! I remember the stories that you used to tell me and the ones that I would tell you...but I never finished them because I didn't know what else to say. :-D
I think you should write a book. You are very good at making up stories!
I love you!
Love,
Ryann

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{ 10:47, 2007-Oct-4 } { Posted by jocelyndixon }

Julia!
Wow, what a lovely story. I really like the dog's name, Cowboy, since I have a goat named that! LOl I also like the name Jill and Tom and Paul! You write very well and I was very thrilled to see you posted.

You will definitely become a writer someday! I know it!... and just maybe by that time I will have my novel published and in catalogs! Hey, I say maybe, didn't I? lol

I also thought up an idea for a book series called... The Adventures of Sus and Luc. What do you think? Auntie? "Based on the tales of Susanna Suarez and LucyLillie Dixon"! LOL! Yes, that and I have another one about one of our goats... I plan on being the next Beatrix Potter.

Ok, enough rambling.. I hope you're doing well! I miss you and can't wait to see you all again!!

Love,
Joci

a nice story, Julia!

{ 11:03, 2007-Oct-5 } { Posted by YoungManInTraining }
that was a good story. I made a story. you will have to come and read it. I will post it on my blog sometime.
I can't wait to see you all again.

your friend forever,
Sir Eric

WOW! I love the story, Julia!

{ 11:07, 2007-Oct-5 } { Posted by RachelsReasoning }
I think you did an AWESOME job on it, girl! It's wonderful!

I can't wait to see you again. And all the gang too (including little Sus!) Love you all and wish you well. Give Auntie a BIG hug and kiss for me, and Sus.

Love,
Rachel

Ps. I will add you to my friends list!

Great reminder for all of us!

{ 03:04, 2007-Oct-6 } { Posted by Dora Tokarski }

Julia,
After a busy week I was finally able to read your story today. You touched my heart. I needed to hear your story about forgiveness, it fits all sizes, young and old. Thank you for beeing such an encouragement to me.
Please, keep writing stories about Jesus and how much he loves us.

Warmly,
Dora

Wow Julie!!

{ 07:00, 2007-Oct-12 } { Posted by FruitfulVineof7SoFar }
What a great story! You are very good at expressing yourself and bringing characters into the storyline!
Keep writing down your thoughts, your stories and even the things you do during the day.
I am not sure if Rachel is still keeping up her journal, but I know she was writing in it every night before she went to bed. I like reading her thoughts and what she did during her days. It is a great resource for later days.
Thank you for shearing it!
Auntie Jacque
;)

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{ 07:45, 2007-Oct-16 } { Posted by twosisters }
What a great story!

Your Sister in Christ,
Rebekah ~ The Elder Sister

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Hello!

{ 05:06, 2007-Oct-17 } { Posted by RachelsReasoning }
I hope you have a wonderful birthday and will post about it!

Love you, Julia!

Love,
Rachel

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{ 09:14, 2007-Oct-18 } { Posted by Emily6m }
Happy birthday!

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{ 09:38, 2007-Oct-18 } { Posted by Brooke96 }
Thats cool i turned 11 on monday want to be friends.

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